please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… Sex video Other than that it was decent at best.READERReport 2006-06-14 16:23:14I think this story is all right for a first time writer. Other than that it was decent at best.READERReport 2006-06-14 16:23:14I think this story is all right for a first time writer. im really looking forward to the sequelREADERReport 2006-06-10 00:11:26it was good, but be a little more descripive and dont use @ and it needs to be a tad bit longer
