Grammar is still shit. Xxx sex video I suggest proof reading it before you publish it.READERReport 2007-10-21 12:31:12I’m working on a second, any tips suggestions? I suggest proof reading it before you publish it.READERReport 2007-10-21 12:31:12I’m working on a second, any tips suggestions? Anything you want to see from any of the characters?READERReport 2007-10-20 00:16:14meh, it was okay… Grammar is still shit. 910«12» 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-23 21:35:41Well its way better than the other ones. i really liked it and usually i can’t stand these kind of stories. you don’t have very many mistakes at all! too many grammar mistakes for my taste. 910«12» 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-23 21:35:41Well its way better than the other ones.
